I wish I could make a flash with this...
[0:00]A small gust of wind blows across the snow-covered street making the flakes dance before his eyes.
[0:14] Then he saw her, across the street. More beautiful than anything he had ever seen before.
[0:19] She lifted her head and their eyes met. Unable to remove his gaze, he saw her lips shape a smile so alluring and yet so pure. She whispered something he couldn't hear, Though he could read from her red lips, the words: "C-A-T-C-H-M-E"
[0:32] Without waiting for an answer she turned around and started running and disappeared into an alley.
[0:38] He started running without realizing it. He had to fulfill her request, he had to see her angelic smile once more. She was always ahead of him, always laughing joyfully as he chased her across streets, over fences, through alleys and into the park where she suddenly stopped running and turned around to face him.
[1:36] She closed her eyes and smiled as she let him embrace her.
Wonderful, truly amazing piece that you've created. It gives me goosebumps and touches my heart. Since I can't flash, I just had to write a story for it.
I really like the calmness in the beginning, followed by a beat that to me resembles the heart of someone who suddenly falls in love and leaves them no other choice but to chase their heart's desire.
Although I like it as it is, I feel that it wouldn't have hurt with it being a little longer.
Not only am I giving this full score 5/5 but it'll have a seat my personal top 5 NG song list. Good luck with your future compositions.
- Draz