Not gonna lie... Ouch
I really liked this one until the piano came in - far too many notes were completely off key on the piano. Despite that, the piano melody has a unique dissonance to it - it would have worked better if the chord progression on the strings was a little different. The little *thump* *thump* *thumpclapclap* would actually have been a semi-decent beat, had better samples been used. I can also picture a nice amount of reverb making them better. You've got a lot of practicing to do, but you can definitely go somewhere with this.