needs diffent beats

it ok,but it seems like its the same beat.but other than that its a good song.

cool

lol, you used mixcraft, I made almost this same thing

is this

music? maybe. it's well played but the drums are so annoying, please make that beat vary. i mean, man. you've probably got it in you to rip out something hardcore, heavy, mean, assaulting.

A great improvement

Clearly just an upgrade of your previous song, a worthwhile one though that I think has ironed out all the little flaws it had. Nicley done!

Great!

Erny, what are you talking about? This song is one of the best I've heard on this site.