First, have more confidence in your music!
This song really isn't all that bad.
The melody is what caught my ear. I listen to a lot of hardstyle trance music, and the melody you've made sounds like one I would hear in a major DJ's song. So nice work with that. Your lead choice was a good one as well. Perfect choice for a hardstyle type of song.
The percussion is what I was most iffy on. I wasn't too sure about it. I didn't like how punchy the kick was. I feel as though it could have been bassier as well as heavier. If you fix that, I think the song would sound a little better.
The break down at the end was a good touch. I enjoyed that.
Overall decent song, needs some work, but still good!
PS: Check out my latest track "Por Que No"