The beginning synth is good
But too repetitive. Make sure you change it up some, you can't just have one melody the whole time. This has potential and maybe if you tried it again you could hit it big.
thanks also to you for your review :) i think i tried it again and make a better song
It needs more to it, and make everything WORK together, so it sounds like one song, not 5 different ones playing at once. and add better bass.. I understand that you may have little experience, but you have good potential to be REALLY good.
keep working hard, and make good songs.
good luck :)
thanks for review :) this song was a one hour work, thats why it is so simple ;) next time i working harder :)