Listening to this I got more of a, let's say, slow paced fighting scene. Too many instruments were used all at the same time so really get a feel of anything. Next time I would suggest using the different instruments at intervals, or syncing them accordingly, because it was all together a little confusing. It had good potential, but in my honest opinion, it was poorly executed. Another thing I think would help is to set it up so the sound rises and falls at different times, so you can picture them getting closer. Anyway, it's all up to you. I wish you the best of luck in the future.