its ok

We´ll never be able to overcome our musicianal phase. Never ever.
This clip is so naïve that becomes something flamingly awesome.
The tune is fuckin´catchy and you can find yourself humming or singing it loudly without realising.
Sir, you´ve created a Monster. A Glorious One.

I've heard this

For a second song it's not bad.
Here's some advice.
Techno isn't a build up type of music or style, whatever. The point is that you need to find a good rythem that you can change and abstract it. Don't just repeat the same things with diffrent sounds. Use diffrent rythems to keep the of the listener.