use more distortion. your fingering skills are excellent (that sounds dirty as hell) but for the kind of speed and the riffing of your soloing you need sustain and distortion in ample supply. that or just play harder. it had a cool bluegrass/metal sound that could of worked better if it was more of either of those things. grunge does owe a lot to rockabilly, and it was good to hear it. but like i said your technical skills were pretty good, but this song suffers a lot from simplicity (even with the layered guitars - they were all the same), poor sound quality, and timing: even recording just the first track with a metronome or click track will improve the rest of the tracks' timings dramatically.
also very good!
As I said in my other review of the original, a very good track, the solos were a nice touch. Keep up the good work!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.