I think you can keep working on it however what i'm hearing here does need alot of work. Its almost like your trying to mix bass's and its not working to well.. The Synth you use at 48 seconds works however. don't give up on it just change it up some!
Thanks, this is the first kind of song I have ever made and can't thank ya enough on the feedback. I'll see what I can do, expect to see another try put up in the next week or so. Peace!