I'm glad I heard this tody
I like your sence of timeing, and buildup. Your biggest weakpoint is the quality of your sound. Spend more time looking for that "just oh so right sound" and you have something even better here.
Loving The Synths
But overall I would rate it average. Try and work on it a bit more. But keep those synths :)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.