Hey man, this is some good stuff. My only problem with it was I was waiting for a brake in the song and it felt like it never came, but thats your choice. I think you should try re-making this one with more of a take off beat cause it kinda feels like it just dies and fades towards the end, the begining is very good tho. I;m going to bump this song up for ya so you get a few more listeners.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.