Not that ultimate
It needs ro be redone. The sounds don't really match and the melody is rather anoying. Nice beat though , but kinda repetitive.
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It's a little rough to be sure...but I won't try and you write you off as simply putting it out there as a joke. You could still make something along this line work - in fact some of the dissonant elements remind me of my own really (well, really really) early work...