its not ur best
which i dig
but its still missing a bit of expression
needs jazz XD
You need a counter-melody
This is a great trance song.
What I think you are missing from this piece is a "partner" melody to run along-side your existing one. It sounds awful lonely all by its lonesome, and in a way, erratic.
The second voice would work like.... An owner holding a dog on a leash, the dog (1st melody) leads to way but the owner (2nd melody) keeps it in line and gives it proper direction.
I would make it the same sound wave, but maybe alter it slightly.
Kepp up the good work,
i like it aswome