1. The music is out of Synchronization
2. The music needs a Good or hard beat
3. Listen to your music, Hear your music clearly and pay attention to every detail of your song.
4. When you make a song think to yourself "Would i listen to this in my spare time or to relax?"
I've spoken to so many arrogant and immature people on here that just post stuff to try n be cool or "Fit in" as some say, If you have talent show it, but don't throw whatever you can on a site just because you think it's "Alright". Pay attention to your work and it will take care of you here on NG, Your song has all the right sounds but just try n put them together at the right place, right time and right speed.
Have a great and successful day!
One of the better reviews i've seen on the site
Thank you very much
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