im with yoda
get rid of the vocals
Well, this may sound harsh, but if you separated the vocals from the rest of the song, you have an amazing trance song. Try it.
Why? Your vocals aren't in the right key...like that other vocal tune I heard. She's in in the key you made, and the easiest way to fix this is to take out the vocals all the way. Put in a simple melody and name it w/e you want. I would be willing to buy that. I mean, you have great backgrounds and stuff, percussion too. but the vocals just turned me off.
I mean this in a constructive-criticism-ist kinda way, nothing against you or anything. Send me a PM when you try it and let me know what you think. I also would be willing to remix this too if you are up to it.