a few problems
I notices a few points where you could tell there was a slight jump in the loop you used at about 0:35
Also, the pauses did not fit because of how you were using them. The music was already at its peak, and you threw in some pauses. Generally, those pauses, from what ive seen, are used to jump up in the beat from lower peaks in the song.
If i could download Garageband then i could also make beats
This is rather lovely however for a techno guitar feeling to it..
Good luck in future ones!
Thanks a lot! :]