Why Are All your Songs Scored 3.81?
Even After I Voted On Them???
eh, not my thing
eh, not my thing
Like the Rest..
I agree with mostly everyone here.
The phaser is too much. It can be a good effect, but in small amounts. I'm going to guess that you recorded your vocals on a standard mic and regular room, causing some of the "Fuzziness". This could have also effected the phaser and synth.
It also sounds like around the 1:20 mark, you tried to fuse two different parts together. I'd fix that, or at least work on editing skills. Remember, practice makes perfect!
As far as vocals, definately increase the volume. I think that your maybe a little insecure of your vocal abilities, so you tried to tone it down as much as possible. I think you have good potential for the vocals, especially for this song, because it fits so well. Just need to better record, and not think so much of what other people think, rather what the song NEEDS.
I hope my input can be of some use. Good Job for what you have, keep it up.
phasing takes out your vocal power, and over stimulates the sustained chords in this piece. that phaser cant be intentional surely. just an uploading error with sound quality? its happened to me before. well thanks anyway. its a nice quiet piece relaxing and almost meditative. makes me think. but unfortunately it cant cut me deep because im always pulled out of the illusion by irritation of phaser. Summed up:
1....Great song, and idea.
2....Destroy the phaser. :D
What you shall say...
...is the song text. Its hard to understand. Although I like clattering sounds very much, it was too strong in this song. I love the piano at 2:10.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.