Really random, too short, and so loud it almost gave me a heart attack, sorry.
yea ur right
needs alot of work.
you have a pretty nice intro to a song going, but... where the hell is the rest? work on it alot more. i'd say that, after this intro, you should follow up with guitar maybe? nah, after the blank space, add some quicker, VARIED beats.
yeah, remember to make different notes once in a while.
I have been working on something better so thanks for the suggestion