YAY Kale! Good job, umm...i like the ending with the bell, it was cool. Your definately getting better.
Little too much going on at once
You have potential you just need the learn some of the basics of what goes with what and when things should be on. You have too many drums going sometimes causing the song to clutter at some points.
Check out my music and you can decide if you want any help. My AIM and MSN is on my page if you want to chat, if you don't have either just PM me I guess.
I can help you out!
Check out some of my stuff. If you like it, and think it's alright, just PM me and we can talk and I can help you out.