I composed this tune years ago, then recorded it a while back when I first got my mic. This was just a single recording whilst I played the piano, mic grasped between my legs as I don't have money for a stand.
I avoided uploading it here until now, thinking I'd do a better version at some point in the future. Truth is, I don't know when that day will be and I'd love your input in the meantime. Also, I was listening to it tonight and it still captures a bit of the vibe I was going for, I feel.
I almost feel like not writing further comments, so I can find out how much the stuff I worried about actually matters.
hahah
"This was just a single recording whilst I played the piano, mic grasped between my legs as I don't have money for a stand."
i love that. hehehe charming charming.
anyways i like this. even though some notes seemed off? or the piano hasn't been tuned in a millennium.
heh
Very Good
I like the way the music gradually builds up, and it really brings up an image of a little waterfall. Not much to improve on that I can see, although perhaps make it a little shorter.
really soft
this song is really slow and classical
You just feel moved by it
Cheers
Seems like a trickling stream
I enjoyed it quite a bit, but I feel it's more like a trickling stream... in slow-mo. Not that that could really fit into a title... "Hey, have you heard A Trickling Stream In Slow-Mo?"
Back on topic. Background sounds would indeed be appreciated. Maybe kick off the song with solely the sound of a stream. For the music to seem more watery, I'd suggest going up a few notes/octaves and pressing lighter. Like light dancing, as it seems a bit forceful around 4:45 when your attempting to press many keys very rapidly. I'd work on the rapid part too. Seems a little out of time.
Overall, very enjoyable. Good work. :)
Hahaha!
I hadn't really considered the notion of water-based sfx.
"For the music to seem more watery, I'd suggest going up a few notes/octaves and pressing lighter. Like light dancing, as it seems a bit forceful around 4:45 when your attempting to press many keys very rapidly."
Fair point. My keys are stiff and that didn't help...
"I'd work on the rapid part too. Seems a little out of time."
Yeah, it almost definitely isn't perfect - I don't use a metronome or anything and a lot of this piece is semi-improvisational. (The late middle/end isn't really in stone.) I guess I can't improvise and keep stuff in time simultaneously. :-(
Thanks for the awesome review.
Stay funky.
Has character, but doesnt spark waterfall imagery
with me, entirely.
=The Good=
-The piano has lots of character, with its muffled EQ and cheap, detuned sound (sounds like it was recorded on a cell phone)
-The melodies are nice when it gets off the ground. Everything was constructed quite well, favorite part was at 2:20, that section has sweet chords
-Playing flows very well, respect. very beautiful.
-Lots of variation throughout
=The Bad=
-This isnt bad at all, I would just expect a more lush piano with lotsa reverb and a crisp sound to go along with a waterfall.I know its not your fault tho.
-I would personally scrap the intro because I dont think it does the piece any good. The general creepy vibes and dissonant notes just dont fit the song I think. Mainly 00:00-00:55ish.
-If you could transcribe this into a computer program, add strings and maybe a harp that would be great
-An actual waterfall sample might help the general imagery
-Hardware is always more important than software when recording, but perhaps a brighter EQ would go with the muffled sound
Ideas: 8.5/10 Diversity: 9/10 Clarity: 6.5/10 Overall: 8/10
I would give this a 9 if it was just for playing, but clarity is an important department and I think that aspect was generally detrimental to your track. Keep at it tho, I would love to hear more playing from you.
Thanks for the review. Breaking down your score was cool.
Your points were clearly made and I like the checklist sytem. I give your review a 9/10.
The detuned sounds are mainly because the piano... hasn't been tuned. I need to sort that out. I think the 0-55s part may have sounded less 'creepy' and more like the water dripping it was meant to resemble if the keys hadn't been so stiff and badly tuned.
I'm not really good with audio software so don't know what a 'brighter EQ' is. And though my skills aren't good enough to add instruments via computer, maybe I'll do that on the keyboard. Thanks for the idea!
Thanks for the awesome review.
Stay funky!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
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