You should try and and mix things around, not keep it so bland, like change around the story of the song, It was just too repetetive.
I did not like this. There was nothing catchy about it. Did you just put random beats into a timeline? Because this really sucks.
Do BETTER next time!!
did you even listen to the whole song?
what is this?
THis sounds like a little kid messing around on a music program on a computer. You could really do much better.