Ok so, this track needs some fixing, first of all, change ur melody, me personally I dont like the melody too much, 2nd, sound choices, please pick better sound choices, like the music theory is somewhat there but the sound choices used here is very lackluster, 3rd, sound design ur own sounds, the stock plugins for garageband is kinda bad, can be used, but for me at least, i dont like it. That's all ^-^ I hope you make more and improve :3

hm not bad