My ears.. The repetitive intro... It rings in my ears <_<
It could have been a lot better, if it wasn't that repetitive. Especially the intro thing.
The longest I'd say for an intro is about... 16 measures. But for your pattern, I'd suggest eight at most.
I'm sorry, but this just didn't cut it. Try harder.
You have no sense. Video game music is supposed to be repetative. It is a game theme. Deal.