What was that in the beginning?
I could only assume that's an intro... A bad one to start out with.
Also, I notice that you have a problem with staying in a scale... Most of the time, if you deviate from a scale, it would sound veeeeery harsh to the ears. Also, you might want to use some different synths and a different sounding snare...
Also, you might want to have some coherence in your song.
Nice try. Better luck next time.
thanks for the insight pretty low score you gave me, but owell atleast someone commented, i really do need alot of help with fl studio, cant seem to get things to sound like i want them to such as whenever i make a song i cant get all the instruments in tune so they are different pitches.