Try using a different set of instruments. The drum track you have in the beginning is a great start! For industrial, you want to keep it kind of lower/darker tone. Try using some of the stuff out of Sytrus like the PWM Saw and such. See what you can come up with. This is definitely a good start though, and I'm sure you can make it a great track with a little work. Your other stuff is really good, too!
hey really appreciate it and yeah ill keep that in mind next time i go industrail
this is nicer but...
the beats are nice and some instruments but the acid at the beggining of the track ia a bit high. it misses som background sound.,,the scratch is a bit annoying....but listen add some more speed.some filter on the acid..some beat loops at the background and some pad to fill in..its better than the other but i think you can make better.well just an opinion dont take it like an agression cus is not..peace
thanx appreciate the review ill try to make another
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