Lacking a bit for a Rock song
Need more balls and edge to it to be a better Rock song. I think you're on the right path of it but you're approaching it at a wrong angle. I'd change the sound of the "instruments" used. Maybe, go with something more traditional or some sounds that feel a bit more edgy and raw. Doesn't have to be a large amount but a couple notches up on the edgy scale with the instruments is good enough.
its very experimentive
you made it with fruity loops right? hmm it's a very unclear song, but you'll learn it :)
that was my first rock:D...i have to learne about more the rock type,,,
it's good for the first time
It sounds much more like techno because of the synthetic beat, you may'll think about chanching it, also try to make more clear melodies/harmonies, it sounds a bit random. Also you can add guitar solos, and don't make the song too full, here the electric/synthetic side is dominating, so the rhythm guitar isn't easy to hear but which would maybe save the whole thing, all in all a good first rock song, you've got potential to develope