Okay, first things first:
1. This is the original recording. I made this before the original since I wanted to see how it sounded.
2. Upbeat 5 is actually a drum set, that's why there's just drums in the song
3. Coco-cola :D
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It's hard to judge something that's only a piece of a complete song, especially since I have no idea what this is accompanying, but this seems kind of stale to me to be honest. My opinion could sway greatly depending on the rest of the elements for your song.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
lighteningzero 
