It's really amazing how such a small piece of music can pack so much emotion. I must have listened to this 20 times or so already and I haven't yet gotten tired of it. Some beautiful playing with nice dynamic control, I feel an overall sense of relief with an underlying tone of sadness. Can't reallly put in words, but you really constructed the chords well to generate some emotion. I also like the bassline and rhodes in the second half, and the addition of the subtle strings really helps to highlight the moods.
For advice, well I think many directions can be built from this little excerpt you have here. Maybe rest your right hand for a while, let the left hand arpeggios roll by for a few bars solo, and then bring a new lead melody on a different instrument like a soothing woodwind such as an oboe. Then you can use the higher registers on the piano to play chords every four bars or something. I would certainly make the strings more apparent and louder, and possibly thicken them up by spreading out the voices and building sustained chords to work as the background layer. Some ambience such as rainfall may help with the scenery, if that's what your going for. Maybe even a slow beat on some drums like hand or ethnic percussion would sound good in here, but it could possibly ruin the mood that you established in the beginning. Just a few suggestions, depends on where you want to go with this. I do believe this has the potential to be a very powerful piece, so keep up the good work and keep me posted if you release a new one! Thanks for sharing with us.
This piece holds a lot of sentimental value for me, so I really appreciate the thorough review and advice! I like a lot of your ideas, and especially agree about the strings. I think I will bring in some deep strings with open chord voicings and run a woodwind through some FX on the computer for a melody. (Like lots of reverb and such :P) I've also thought about some ethnic percussion like an Indian hand drum, but I do think it may destroy the mood if executed poorly.
Thanks again for the advice and review. I'll keep you posted on any new developments with this song. :D
You dont really know me or anythign so I dont know why I am actually about to tell you this but here goes. I had testicular cancer and after my surgery I was laid up for quite awhile. I was messing around on newgrounds looking for stuff to listen to and came across this piece and it actually made me cry. All I could think of was the struggle to stay sane when being wheeled through the ER and trying to make my peace with God. NOw everytime I think about it this song has become the soundtrack to my memory of that event and it fills me with hope that someone who has not goene through what I have can seem to understand deep down the pain adn suckitude I actually went through. Thank you.
Man, that's a rough situation...I'm relieved to hear that you've made it through in one piece. I've had surgery for my appendix, but have been healthy aside from that. I can't begin to imagine what you must have gone through. :(
Thank you so much for sharing that, though. Stories like that...and knowing that I was able to make even a small bit of difference in a person's life...It is truly fulfilling. I'm glad that you were able to recognize the emotion that I poured into this song.
Thank you once again, and I wish you the best of health!
that song was sssssoooo relaxing, I had a very long stressful day 2day and it was nice 2 kick back and listen to this song, I like how well it flows, it seems like its more than 34 seconds long! Keep making more, good job!
I know how being stressed can be. I'm right there with you. :P I'm glad to have helped, though. I'll be putting out plenty of new music soon. :)
Wow the song flow so well i didn't know it repeated. Can't wait for more of your works.
Thanks, I appreciate it. I'll be posting more soon, so keep an eye out! ;-D
If I were able to run this through a few of my programs, I might be able to actually help you lengthen it though, because it starts to build towards a climax right towards the end of the loop. I think if you were to continue with that atmosphere sound that plays alongside the piano, maybe put in some bells or a soft triangle or something.
I still have the midi file for editing, actually. I'll take your advice to heart, though. I like the soft triangle and bells idea. :P
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