I understand the...
mellow flow you're trying to create.
You start to get it until around :47 when that shrill came in. I would suggest turning the volume down on that.
The beat sounds like something is off, like you're using two different sounding kicks or something. And that...I dunno, that you add at around :40, throws the whole thing off.
It's not bad, you have a good platform, but I would go back and revise some things.
The guitar/strings at the end were real nice also.