im deffinately black

and i like it. :D

ZOMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1!

wow

that is creepy. but its perfect. it touches my soul. ive never heard anything like it. perfection

Cool narrative

Really like the vocoder effects - the chords feel pretty on in supporting the imagery from the words. I think you might be able to do a bit more with it, though. Right the vocoder feels a bit too strong throughout (except that bit at the beginning without any vocoding; was it fluke?) - it might be a neat idea to adjust the wet-dry mix dynamically so you can phase into deeper vocoding for the more dramatic parts, and less so others and thus give a stronger sense of contrast.
And if you really want to paint the words even more, try adding even more effects here and there (ie, ring modulation, convolution, distortion, etc), and fade them in and out dynamically as well. Maybe some soft chordal padding here and there would also help in further shaping the piece, and just filling it out a bit more (especially in the bass ranges which the voice/vocoder doesn't provide).
Still, really neat idea in with this colorful narrative. Nice job!

Very Original

I would have never of thought to tell a story through a vocoder. It gives a pretty spooky effect. I love the fact that it goes through a series of chords, it sent chills done my spine, and the story is great.

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