Not exactly "Heavy Metal" sounding, but it's ok
While the drums kind of had a heavy metal feel, the riff and progression really had more of a blues feel. That said, the "extreme" drums don't fit in well at all - unless you are going to change the feel and instrumentation of the rest of the piece, at least. But overall sounds alright, if kind of generic (needs a more ornamentated melody).
Nice job with the drums, even if they are a little flat... Are you sure this is the right section? It'd do better in general rock
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.