The crappy poorly mixed techno completely fails to match up with the lyrics. Your trying to mix two moods here, and it doesn't work at all. The whinny soft lyrics sets a completely different tone than the actually music itself. This is a bad mix, and theres a reason why it's never actually done (often I guess).
You need to either completely do the sound and style of the lyrics, or the sound and the style of the song. Better luck next time.
1/5 - 3.86 / 5.00 (- 0.47)
By all means, if you can come up with a better set of lyrics and such, please let me know. Record yourself and let me hear how good it can get.
Couldn't understand the lady but...
That really actually helped it out. Im not sure if It would have gotten better If I could but It might have or might not. Anyways, good job.