Good Idea, but...
Although I could Imagine this as Halo, it's rough and offbeat at times.
theres alot of mistakes in this remix, there are alot of offbeat notes, and from the sounds of it, you didn't do much practice,
the second guitar was really meesed up. and it wasn't smooth.
The notes didn't quite do it.
The one problem with the idea of the Halo Theme with a rock twist is that it already is sort of a rock inspired song.
I thought that using the more staccato style notes as the melody didn't really work. There were a bunch of a mistakes throughout (though the bass stayed perfect...), the melody never got high enough, and it sounded like some of those notes were being cut off.
Still, I give you points just for trying on such a dastardly recognizable song -- I know I could never play it anywhere near as good, so I have a deep respect for you.
G'luck in the future!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.