Decent guitar work, and I can always appreciate someone working in the atmosphere with the echo-y organ in the background. I think at about 1:45 with the sudden dropoff, it doesn't work as well as it could, and the dual layering of the lyrics is a good concept, but just executed poorly.
Agree completely with the previous review about the soft vocals at 2:10, and at the end, fade down the music slightly, and let the vocals sustain a bit more, so the sudden cutoff has the indended impact, without leaving the listener wondering what the hell happened.
Alot of potential in there, keep working at it.
I can dig this.
Between 0:02 and 0:03 it sounds like the guitarist forgot what he was supposed to do. It picks up very nicely though. The vocals could use a little bit of work, but overall it's a decent song. Keep on it.
A few critiques, at 2:10 don't make the vocals so soft and don't have such a sudden cut off at the end (2:42). Let the vocal sustain a bit longer.
thanks, boogeyratt! i understand what you mean, and of course, we know it's not our best. i guess everyone can improve on something. thanks for the critiques, and we're glad you liked the song!
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