Try not to click your mouse during the recording. I used to do that, and listening to my old recordings, I'll twitch everytime I hear a click.
You may want to adjust your microphone settings next time.
It's not bad it's (Don't take it the wrong way) You need to speak a little loadly cues I can really hear you're voise. I can bearly hear it and it does sound great but you need to speak up for people can hear you. But it's 10/8 and 5/4
No it doesn't!
The playing is solid and up to tempo.
Your voice is a bit overtaken by the keys in this one. Needs moar volume.
Try less breathier singing, should fit better with this song.