That has potential, YOU have some damn potential, the thing is, everything feels like it's all thrown in. Everything's mixing together perfectly for the rythm, problem is the melody really is just some kind of a cacophony. Keep it up man, you're about to get to something good.
Take it easy, 3/5
i almost liked it
This could be a really good song with a lot of work.
You need to change the melody because right now it sounds out of tune.
It's also too repetitive.
Otherwise, not bad.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.