aahh dude! this is just a bunch of random notes! i dont like it. ok. here comes a lot of advice. better duck.
first of all, do you know the even number rule? i doubt it, cuz your clap and the other percs didnt come in at the right time. whenever you want to like change something or add more instruments, you do so after 4 or 8 measures. see there. no odd numbers.
second of all, you need to change your beats. btw, what program do you use?
heres a standard simple (good-sounding) beat:
kick * - - - - - * - - - * - - - - -
snare - - - - * - - - - - - - * - - -
hat * - * - * - * - * - * - * - * -
melodies are a bit more complicated. to make lead melodies, just start off with a 4 or 8 or 12 measure long tune. then play the same tune again but change a few of the notes. and make sure it sounds ok. do that for a few measures, then switch to a different melody, using the same method. you also need to put 1 to 3 sub melodies in there. they should be short and simple. no need to get carried away. all the notes need to compliment each other, so it might not work out at first.
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