Intro is empty. Try to introduce with kick and bass. Try spending some time on the bass.
Clap rhythm was unnatural. Try using claps on 2 and 4 rather than on the offbeats. Bass sounds like boobase rather than a resonance pluck or sawtooth that is usually appropriate for trance. It seems to harmonize well, though.
The lead needs to be brought out more and moved up an octave. Its too low and too quiet. There needs to be more variety in the melody to keep interest.
The instruments are very quiet, and the painful rhythm sorta hurts. Its very, very repetitive. A good trance song has an intro that's DJ friendly, and then drops the energetic rhythm, and builds back up to an epic climax. That's the main point of trance.
Here are some good NG trance artists to learn elements from:
Pulstate (he's pro now)
They all do a great job of building up, and using the elements of trance well. Pulstate particularly excels at pretty much all elements. Karco is better at the macro arrangement, and Endlessnumber is good at melodic work and repetitive-styled arrangement. I'd advise that you check them all out to get a feel for the "point" of trance.
Just keep working and learning. You will improve. Try to learn music theory, so you know all about key and chords. Try to learn about processing drums so they are phat and punchy, and try to learn about arrangement so its like an auditory journey.
Could use some work, but good for a beginner. Synths were generally nice for someone at your level. 7/10, 5/5 (because everyone loves 5s, and everyone gets 0d).