As a sorta ambient dnb
it's ok, but from a dance perspective, it's NOT a dance song. The major thing you're missing is a low, but not uber-low bass synth with a LFO attached to really add some tension... There isn't enough pitch--too many drums.
You know, looking at this now, I really agree with you. I mean, I think the song is okay up until the final chorus, but then it really sounds sloppy. You're definitely right. I crammed too many drums in. Fortunately I'm making a follow up to this that is turning out to be MUCH better. :)
I may step it. It would be so much fun as an ITG 13 footer. Great song.
this is good =D http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/121117 cheack my work out, this one might make you laugh
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.