Loved It
Still waiting to hear more from you.
Suggestions
The music opening was so slow and mellow then your first words were just too unexpected and fast. Either slow down or lose the drums that play when you first start speaking.
Consider getting a female to do the voice or another guy with a weird female voice. Yours isn't bad but my imagination/memory of what the female in the song sounds like is better than the actual song.
As much as I love fast rap I think you should try slowing it down just a little. Towards the end of the song you have so much to say that it winds up slightly off beat in a bad way (i signed away my life wanting to impress my wife and she took away my manhood with a ???? knife). Yeah, too many syllables for the tempo of the song right there. I'd like to hear you slow that part down and pad it out so that verse is longer. Then maybe it won't feel so short overall.
Love the song. Post more.