Still waiting to hear more from you.
The music opening was so slow and mellow then your first words were just too unexpected and fast. Either slow down or lose the drums that play when you first start speaking.
Consider getting a female to do the voice or another guy with a weird female voice. Yours isn't bad but my imagination/memory of what the female in the song sounds like is better than the actual song.
As much as I love fast rap I think you should try slowing it down just a little. Towards the end of the song you have so much to say that it winds up slightly off beat in a bad way (i signed away my life wanting to impress my wife and she took away my manhood with a ???? knife). Yeah, too many syllables for the tempo of the song right there. I'd like to hear you slow that part down and pad it out so that verse is longer. Then maybe it won't feel so short overall.
Love the song. Post more.
10/10 and 5/5 the lyrics are funny as hell, i was able for anything she brought to the table, able or not, table or not....that line had me crackin up man, good job on the song
I'm seriously looking forward to hearing more fr
Probably the best song I've heard on the AP.
So much about this song rocks. The beats are great - cool syncopation and variation.
The starting intro really has a sorta 'creepy circus theatre show' vibe.
The lyrics are great and I love your different voices. The robotic section works well and the whole thing makes me chuckle.
At the start, I felt the lyrics were a tad cliche, but I love the story and the way it turns out. You've got cool sections that mirror parts from before and a great variety of ways you deliver the words.
I'm seriously looking forward to hearing more from you.
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Not my thing
The first thing I'd suggest is that you get a female voice artist for the woman's parts, as it sounds off, when you are doing a falsetto for her parts.
I think that the run into the start of the rap was a little off time, as the first time you hear it, the whole thing sounds very messy. You've given yourself quite a quick beat, which means that you're making a rod for your own back, as it's difficult to go from standing to the 90-120 beats per minute that you seem to have.
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I really really liked this, the beat was arranged well, and the rest of the backing music seemed to give off this weird circus vibe. And fitted perfectly with the lyrics. And these would have to be the greatest lyrics I've heard yet off the Audio Portal. It was just excellent in everyway. Deep meaningful and thoughtout perfectly. Loved the tempo ya sing in too. Off sometimes, not others, just a very very good song
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