Just like your other song, "Organ Donor", this song is majorly lacking in a lot of ways to be a good modern hip-hop song. The loud buzzing lead is alright, but I think it extends for too long in your song. The little vibraphone sounding instrument is a nice touch, and it kind of leaves a little mystery feeling to the song--and somewhat leaves me the memory of Goldeneye music, which this song kind of imitates. Don't get me wrong... I don't think you were trying to imitate anything as far as certain artists, albums, or songs go, but you certainly are trying hard at this genre. Make better attempts at filling the song up with both highs, mids, and lows especially. Lows are very important and will help you establish a good base for your song. You can always choose to do a melody first, which is sometimes easier for me, but whatever way works. Anyways, this is what I'd consider mediocre, but I know you can do better. I was at this stage actually... I made music that sounded just like this... until I started listening to reviews sounding like this one... mean maybe, but truthful. My intention here isn't to be mean, though, but to help you get a better sound and rating. Improve in any way you can... even by comparing your compositions to other hip-hop songs or even by trying out new things. Keep practicing!