Strong criticism engage!
1. Did you use the default kick in fl? loool
2. Sytrus presets
3. I know this is like ambient trance , but melody is golden
4. Them kicks dont match up if your trying to use the 4 on the floor method.
5. The open hat is like rofl - - -  - - -  throughout the WHOLE track lol
I dont know you asked for it. I could go on and on.
If your new then your at least experimenting in ways that will better yourself in the future.
Good luck and dont give up.