I like what you're doing alot.
The intro is great
That synth-string chords in the background of the intro -- I likey.
+that g'damn drum fill XD.
I'm not big on vox, but I I like them here.
I like the lyrics.

The timbre could be better with the piano/drums, but only when it's solo without much backing. It's a bit "stock".
but y'know...you've made such a fun little piano jive It's hard to care. You're notes and mix transcend.
The late 90's sounding midi-keyboard solo (flute? or something/used as an epiano thing) @ 3:90 is fun has heck and reminds me of old n64 game OST or something.

The fill ~3:56 to vox is <3.

If I'm going to judge -- Deep crit:

@1:17 the "falsetto" (pitch-shift?) vox feel ever-slightly off when you say ">>And<< I saw a man, off the lane. ", it sounds ever-so-slightly off.

@4:40 as well when falsetto "and"
I could also be crazy.

You're one of the songs I've been stuck on in the NGAUC this round. I dunno what this means.
I wanna hear this in an anime OP for whatever reason. XD

:shrugemoji:

I like the energy and the beat is quite nice, although repetitive.