Not bad for first time dance
But in the song you should add a more interesting beat, it's a bit too repetitive. But go on and practise because I like dance music :)
I gave it a 4. Catchy little tune :P
I like this style in your song out of ANY of your other's, you were a little harsh on my FIRST song EVER, but, im going to be nice, I enjoy'd this, and YOU should finish the song, Its a better style than your other work, your other work would be a 2/5 and 4/10 THIS is a 4/5 and a 9/10.. I ejoyed it, especially then "Whao, whao, whao" in the end of it. If I had better programs to make music with, mine wouldnt be AS bad, Check out my submission, "Sleepless Dragon" when it uploads :]
Agree with the last review.
I agree with everything the last review says, only i like the unstructured part, i have a song or 2 myself that aren't too structured but sound good.
There's a lot of unstructuredness in the piece, you might want to use some more melodical progressions on the strings, and use the fx more sparely, also add more than the one note there is on the high pitched synth. At least you have a steady drum beat to work on. I'd easily see something cool to evolve from this.
Thanks for the tips....this isn't really my own style so please listen to some of my other stuff.