How have more people not found this yet, this is now stuck in my head

Notbad

I like the sound here but starting at about 08:00 and some other points the quality seemed kind of low quality and not sure what to think there but maybe it can be cleaned up just a tad, you did a fantastic job as your first piece though and had some nice style about it.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Some quality stuff but not by much.

~X~

nice

it got stuck in my head @__@
10/10 5/5 :D

haha

u used the lightspeed and eurogate allot, lol

if this is the first song you've ever made

then good work. it shows you can pick things up quickly. Drums really aren't bad. Synths will likely get "fatter" as you master techniques of layering, synthesis/sample and synth programming, and fx routing (parallel, modular, insert and otherwise). Synthesis and even techno can become such a deep field to the people who really investigate it that it might seem overwhelming. Maybe you'll get to the point one-day where you can code your own synths (difficult task to do it right, to be sure) and you'll no longer need to rely on other people's inspiration for virtual instrument ideas.

whichever path you might take, just make sure to try new things and invest in the best possible monitoring environment you can (behringer truths would be a good start unless you've already got a better pair or mix with headphones). always remember that there is a better way to do things.