You have a great piece of movie music, my friend!! You have much to learn but you are in the right way!!
Not too bad...
Just a bit bland...
Add in some new instruments about midway, or something.
I like your note sequences, just change 'em up more.
And the title doesn't really fit it.
Other than that, good work.
Well thanks for the advices, I'll try to flesh it out more next time.