Some Constructive Criticism.
well... I really dont wanna be just the next one down here to say "great work, I damire your voice, simple but effective" blablabla etc etc etc, so I'm gonna try and find some BAD things about this song. Assuming you're still reading your reviews.
Okaay.. so I got a few points of critique.
The Song is waaaaay too short. You need some more minutes to make it more attractive! As a listener, when I#m listening to a Song with Lyrics, I want to be taken on a Journey, I want to forget the rest of the World for a while. 1min 46sec is NOT a while. It's 1min46secs. Baraely a moment in time, a biink of an eye. I need prolonged lyrical entertainment. And this Song needs at least 4-5 more stanzas.
MORE piano. When you make a Song with just ONE instrument, you can't just use it as a tool to lay some harmonies underneath the singing and play a few fills here and there... otherwise it just feels incomplete. And c'mon.. this Song DOES feel incomplete.
The Instrument you use needs to retell the story of the Lyrics; compose Musical phrases that mirror the Protagonist's feelings; the various changes the story undergoes until it's conclusion; phrases that emphasize the (at least two) different points of view the characters in your story have. Make it EPIC, not in the sense that word is used in mostly nowadays, but in its TRUE sense: Telling a story. That's what an instrument is supposed to do.
I do get it that this Song is intended to be a "fun" Song, and it totally sounds like one. But I kinda listened to about everything you put on newgrounds, and in my opinion the critique above can be applied to all of your works that are meant to stand by themselves (scores for filmmusic are something entirely different), so it kinda didn't matter where i posted this.
I totally dig your Song "Hypnotize" which is much more complete than most (Still not perfect, though).
I don't mean to be disrespectful in ANY way, I'm just offering some helpful advice for your future projects. I hope you get what I'm trying to convey in this (probably much too long) review.
I really do like your work and I hope you continue producing Songs on your current Level, hopefully even better.
felt it necessary to put this in here just so I can point out that the guy beneith me is a douchebag. Thanks for your time.
Thanks for that, it's just plastered a massive grin on my face. I really needed it.
I dont think that it should affect the score though, but either put *dirty* in the title (Because of the one swear in the song) Or make a clean version. Although this song is actually quite sexist, I personally dont mind it, simply because of your amazing vocal talent.
Like all of your songs this is incredibly simple, but it works, because it's just your vocals... and a piano, I actually really like the chords, and dont get me started on your harmonies, because I will be here all day... Suffice to say, they are amazing.
I like this. Keep up the good work.
THIS IS FUCKING AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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