Room for improvement
Ok, i think the progression isn't too fluid, it doesn't really connect too well, it seems a little too random. The synths chosen were alright, but I think that you should try and connect the song more smoothly transition through parts to mix it up, but keep it running smoothly. You can still maintain that erratic trance rhythm, just pick your chords and progressions a bit more carefully.
Also, consider the song as a whole, make sure it has enough energy and variation to continue through the whole song without getting boring, give it a decent climax.
maybe then you'll get a better score from me.
Keep working at it.
Hey bro, keep it up... you are improving greatly!
It's pretty good
I really like the intro-ish part. Something isn't quite there still. Maybe a leading voice in this. I mean, earlier in the song. The second half, 1:42ish is good, but is needed before this. The outro was pretty good also. Keep it up. Why don't you listen to my new song, The Adventure? It's pretty good. I actually just threw it together tonight for a few hours. It's like beating a video game. You feel you got something accomplshed and you can show it.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.