sounds a bit like "Easter Parade" in the middle. Was that intentional?
Hm...like I said, needs work...I think if you could just synchronize the harmonies, especially in the beginning, it would sound a lot better.
Myxibrium mentioned the snare drum-esque sound in the background-I can understand how it sounds like that, but I think it's more like someone blowing into a microphone. If it's supposed to be a snare drum, the sound should be...crisper...if that makes sense.